This post is part of Devil Week, courtesy of the amazing Eric. As I couldn’t find a movie I’d reviewed containing the word devil, I thought I’d do something else. I decided to use my alter ego Satrap as inspiration and right a devilish post. Warning people, this post will be somewhat sexual so if you’re easily offended please look away now.
Satrap could hear the cheers from backstage and it excited him. Friday night was the guarantee that it would be a packed crowd and the signs weren’t wrong .All of these screaming ladies where here just for him, the star attraction and fulfilling fantasies. And tonight it would be scorching because of his new outfit. A devil cape, horns and a nifty red leather thong was the regalia in question and Satrap had a feeling it would be well-received by his adoring audience.
“And please welcome to the stage, your very own devilish dynamo, Satrap” came the call from his hype announcer Emmy.
Satrap slinked onto the stage with purpose and sexual aggression. The screams erupted as cougars fanned themselves with money at the sight of this Adonis. The music began blaring and the raunchy routine began. Satrap moved his hips from side to side, making sure that the audience got a decent look at his peachy bum. His scarlet cape whirled around like a dervish as a smile of satisfaction crept onto his face. Spicing things up, he slowly removed the cape and threw it into the adoring and fawning crowd. The girl who grabbed hold of it looked like she was going to faint because of her excitement. Satrap rubbed his well-defined hands across his muscled chest and began to grind like there was no tomorrow.
The routine began to gather momentum as a new song began. The sweat was pouring as the bright lights shone down on the specimen of masculinity, giving pleasure to those around him. A girl at the front row was beckoned by Satrap with a come hither finger as she approached him. Gently taking her hands, he navigated her fingers across his abs as she smiled with passion. Her hands moveds lower and she slapped his peach of a bum with excitedly. His buttocks waggled in unison to this action as he seductively slipped her back in her seat.
“Come on now Satrap” Emmy shouted with enthusiasm. “You know what everyone here came for”.
Satrap knew exactly what she meant and slowly but surely the red leather thong was lowered as he faced the back of the stage. The red leather slid down his legs like a snake and eventually hit the floor. Now Satrap thought it was time for the finale. He spun around, his hands covering his penis and then threw his hands in the air, revealing his manhood for the audience. The screaming reached fever pitch as money was thrown on the stage and Satrap shook his member between his legs, letting it slap his thighs with intention. It would appear that his devilish idea had payed dividends and now he was the sex god if ever there was one. The lights on Satrap dimmed as the roaring applause and screams rang out loudly, and he quickly assembled what money he could find in his space. It was another job well done for the Satrap of Sin.
beetleypete said:
(I see you got Emma in there, V!)
Perhaps you should start a series of books? Licentious fiction is very popular now, and Satrap’s adventures backstage could supply much-needed thrills to an certain section of the populace. With the devil theme in mind, you could call it something like ‘Fifty Shades Of Red’…
Cheers mate, Pete.
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vinnieh said:
Had to give my blogging sister a shout out. That licentious fiction could be a very good idea,
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Anna (Film Grimoire) said:
Written with professionalism! It’s like you have an insider knowledge into this particular line of work!
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vinnieh said:
Haha, no it’s just my naughty imagination.
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emmakwall said:
Aside from being rude and funny that was REALLY well written Vinster! You should seriously consider writing some erotic literature 🙂
Thanks for my shout-out lol, it really made me laugh reading “You know what everyone here came for” – haha! Cheeky!!!!! 🙂
A brilliant and original entry for #DevilWeek love it!!!! ❤ ❤ ❤
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vinnieh said:
Haha, was it erotic enough for you Emma? Couldn’t help but give you a reference.
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emmakwall said:
It was super erotic, comical and I reiterate VERY well written 🙂
You ever do anything like this online? Fan fiction, erotic fiction etc.?
🙂
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vinnieh said:
Aww you make me blush, hope it gave people some form of pleasure.
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emmakwall said:
I bet it did!! I know it did 🙂
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vinnieh said:
That makes me feel so sexy, knowing people had a ball with this.
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emmakwall said:
You’re a very talented man Vinster 🙂
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vinnieh said:
I don’y know about that Emma, but thanks for the lovely compliment.
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emmakwall said:
I meant every word! (I really did)
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vinnieh said:
Thank you so much, any parts of it get you hot and bothered?
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emmakwall said:
Not as such (but that’s probably because you’re my brother) but it made me laugh and also made me think how clever you were and a very good writer. I’m sure some people would find it very hot indeed!
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vinnieh said:
I never think of myself as funny, but if it made you laugh, I feel good. It was meant to be pure sexy, but a bit of humour is always good.
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emmakwall said:
Oh that’s just me though, honestly I 100% KNOW that some people would find that sexy but I’m the kind of person that always giggles at rude things…if you know what I mean!
And because I know you quite well (I like to think so anyway) it just made me smile and think “classic Vinnie!” kind of thing. So yeah I did find it funny, but only in a really good way!!!! 🙂
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vinnieh said:
The response it’s getting is sexy and makes me feel good about posting it.
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Mel @ The Creative Fox Den said:
Hahaha! This is incredible! So creative and incredibly well written. You always impress 🙂
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vinnieh said:
It wasn’t too rude then for you?
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Mel @ The Creative Fox Den said:
Not at all! It was great!
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vinnieh said:
Any particular favourite parts?
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Mel @ The Creative Fox Den said:
All of it was great, you seem to really love writing about this character. That’s what makes it awesome 🙂
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vinnieh said:
Satrap is a great character to write about.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
This really is a well written piece of erotic fiction Vinnie. And I love the shout out to our Emma! Seriously though, you should do some more of this. You’re much more talented than E.L. James!
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vinnieh said:
I may consider writing more like this Kim. Any bits stand out for you or make you hot and bothered?
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Honestly? I just liked the whole thing. The set-up, everything. I felt as though I was there. (Fanning face)
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vinnieh said:
That’s great to hear, did you find it sexy though? That was my aim for this piece.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
I definitely did! This is an example of erotic fiction at it’s finest! I’d loves to read more about Satrap.
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vinnieh said:
You’re too kind to me. Anything in particular you’d want if I decided to do another Satrap story?
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
I’d like a little more of his physical appearance:facial features, hair, etc.
And also more of his backstory?
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vinnieh said:
That can be arranged, though it may take a while to write.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
No rush! Right now I’m picturing him as guess who?!
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vinnieh said:
Could it be Matt Bomer?
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
How on earth did you ever guess?!😆
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vinnieh said:
Hehe, he is your dream guy. After your husband of course.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Sigh.😊 And he can sing too.😌😌
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vinnieh said:
Just remember Kim, when you’re feeling low imagine him with you on a tropical beach, him without a shirt serenading you.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Lovely!😌😎
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vinnieh said:
That was the intention Kim.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
☺️☺️☺️☺️
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vinnieh said:
Matt Bomer always brings a smile to you. Just out of curiosity, does your husband resemble him?
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Well, he’s a brunette. 🙂 I always embarrass him by commenting on his beautiful green eyes and long lashes!
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vinnieh said:
Hehe, I think everyone has a celebrity they have a major thing for. Mine has got to be Monica Bellucci, she’s just so beautiful.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Hmm. I haven’t heard of her. I’m going to go look her up right now.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Yep! She’s gorgeous! So not fair. 😦
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vinnieh said:
She’s going to be in the next Bomd movie. And I read the other day she is 50, she looks good.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
She’s 50? Seriously? Okay. Now I’m going to go drown myself!😒😞
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vinnieh said:
I’m serious, please don’t drown yourself Kim. The blogging community would suck without you.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Sigh. I won’t. But honestly? If I could have just one of her features, or her figure for that matter. Ah well. C’est La Vie! Thank you for your kind and generous words though.
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vinnieh said:
I’m sure you look fabulous Kim, like Venus on the mountaintop.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
Er, more like the mountain top! Thank you though my friend!
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vinnieh said:
Everyone is beautiful in their own way Kim.
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By Hook Or By Book ~ Book Reviews, News, & Other Stuff said:
True. The world would be quite boring if it was filled only with beautiful people. At least that’s what I like to tell myself.
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vinnieh said:
Beauty takes many forms, we all have something good within us.
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theipc said:
Very nice!! Very well written!! You are a dynamo!!
#devilweek
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vinnieh said:
Thanks Eric, I love being a dynamo. This post has got people very hot and turned on I’ve noticed.
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theipc said:
Congrats!
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vinnieh said:
People keep saying I should write more material like this.
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theipc said:
You should if you feel like it : )
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vinnieh said:
It could be an idea.
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HusbandAndHusband said:
Great job, Vinnieh. This was well written and pretty entertaining. I like that you strayed from the original post by Eric and made it your own. Well done my friend.
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vinnieh said:
People have really responded to it saying it was very erotic.
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HusbandAndHusband said:
I thought it was great!
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vinnieh said:
Would you say it was sexy?
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HusbandAndHusband said:
At the very least.
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vinnieh said:
Cheers, I love getting feedback. Is there anything you’d want to see if I did future posts like this?
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HusbandAndHusband said:
Maybe…expand the story further a bit. That would be interesting.
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vinnieh said:
You mean like detail the backstage escapades and stuff like that?
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HusbandAndHusband said:
Yup. Even some backstory.
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vinnieh said:
Anything in particular?
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HusbandAndHusband said:
Just more of a backstory (whatever it is). Your story is fine as a short glimpse, but if you want to develop it into a short story or even a novel, I would work on backstory. Your characters could be reoccurring through your blog, expanding more and more.
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vinnieh said:
You put it so eloquently, will take what you’ve said into account. Thanks for your supportive words.
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HusbandAndHusband said:
No problem!
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vinnieh said:
You guys always have some great feedback.
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HusbandAndHusband said:
We try ; )
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vinnieh said:
Seriously though, your comments give me confidence in my writing.
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HusbandAndHusband said:
I’m glad. You’re a great writer.
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vinnieh said:
Likewise, you guys have a great way with words and a genuine sense of fun.
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HusbandAndHusband said:
: ) You flatter us.
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vinnieh said:
I’m speaking the truth.
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Khalid said:
Haha great post man! Yes to more Satrap!
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vinnieh said:
I have taken note of that Khalid.
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Laura said:
I wasn’t sure what level of filth we’d be dealing with here, but I’d say you got it about right!
Happy Devil Week!
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vinnieh said:
My sincere thanks, I tried to keep it on the right side of sexy.
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abbiosbiston said:
Ooo-er… I am BLUSHING!
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vinnieh said:
Haha, take it you found it hot then.
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amandalyle1986 said:
Whoa! Slapping his member between his legs *blushes*
This little number got me a little hot under the collar. A very well written and sensual piece.
Will there be more?
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vinnieh said:
Told you it would be saucy. There could be more posts like this, but at the minute I’m just on TV and movie reviews.
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amandalyle1986 said:
You should definitely do some more! *bats eyelashes*
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vinnieh said:
I’m considering it.
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amandalyle1986 said:
👍👍👍
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jeffgoulding said:
You may have a career in erotic fiction here my friend. Keep going and well done. Is this your first piece of fiction?
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vinnieh said:
Haha. Well the whole Satrap concept started because of something I did for another blogger where I reviewed Magic Mike. It’s my first piece of fiction on here.
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vinnieh said:
If you’re interested, this was the post that introduced Satrap. http://isaacspictureconclusions.com/2015/07/03/shitfest-2015-summer-magic-mike/
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T. Mack said:
So fun!
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vinnieh said:
Hope it wasn’t too graphic for you. Did you have a favourite part?
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T. Mack said:
Not at all. The part that stood out for me what when he spun around with his hands over his junk then threw his hands up. I don’t know why but that part made me giggle. Something about the way the image formed in my mind.
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vinnieh said:
Happy it made you giggle, I wonder what the other sisters will make of this post.
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T. Mack said:
We’ll have to let them take a look and find out. I’ll share the link with them. 🙂
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vinnieh said:
Thank you so much, let’s hope they find it sexy.
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Mark Walker said:
Haha! Cleverly done, man. You dog you! Should I call you Satrap now or is that just your Sunday name? 😉
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vinnieh said:
You can call me Satrap if you want Mark. The name was coined by Eric after I jokingly pretended to be a stripper. It lead me to review Magic Mike for Shitfest, with a review from me and my alter ego.
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Mark Walker said:
Haha! Excellent stuff, man. I’m looking forward to interacting more with you guys again. I’ve missed the laughs the blogosphere can bring.
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vinnieh said:
I’m looking forward to talking to you more bud. You seem to be on my wavelength with naughty humour and sex crazed imagination. Here’s that naughty Shitfest entry. http://isaacspictureconclusions.com/2015/07/03/shitfest-2015-summer-magic-mike/
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Mark Walker said:
I’m always up for a bit of debauchery my man! That’s why Mr Isaacs and I became good friends. 🙂
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vinnieh said:
Same here, hope you like my Shitfest entry. It was very popular.
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Mark Walker said:
I’ll swing by on that very soon, man!
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vinnieh said:
You rock so much Mark, you bad ass peachy bum lover.
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Mark Walker said:
Ahaha! Peachy Bum lover! I like it!
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vinnieh said:
You’re in good company as I’m a peachy bum lover too.
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meganmilesauthor said:
Sexy entertainment!! I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing!
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vinnieh said:
Loved hearing your enthusiastic response.
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Matt Melo said:
Thoroughly enjoyed that! Who needs Christian Grey or Magic Mike with Satrap parading around in a red leather thong?
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vinnieh said:
That’s high praise indeed. I tried to make the post as sexy as possible and it seems like I succeeded. Any favourite parts of it?
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Matt Melo said:
A lot of great descriptions but one of my favourites is ‘the red leather slid down his legs like a snake’
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vinnieh said:
Glad it could please you, many people have said I should have a career in saucy fiction.
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Matt Melo said:
yeah you should consider doing some more stories like this… I’d be interested to read more.
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vinnieh said:
I may consider it. From the response that this post got, a lot of people said it made them horny.
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Lady Ate said:
Oh wow… It was really hot , so well written and you ended it in right moment when we want to know more so it was brilliant move. I love details in your story, and it was so delicious. I hope you will write more about it… love it sweet. bravo. write more… 🙂 <33
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vinnieh said:
You really liked it. Oh thanks so much for commenting. I only wrote this as an off the cuff thing but many people say I should write more saucy stuff.
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Lady Ate said:
Of course I do sweet. it’s really great. the most important that is giving you pleasure and it’s giving us… mmm so hot thoughts… and more of your spicy story.. please… 😊🌹
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vinnieh said:
Well I’m happy to know that the story turned you on.
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Heartafire said:
Hi Vinnie, you’ve done a great job setting the scene for the protagonist, the sexy stripper, this is a fine flash fiction piece and would make a great series, becoming more intricate in detail and actions. Carry on. :)Good job!
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vinnieh said:
Oh thank you so much for the feedback. I have considered writing more stuff like this, but haven’t had the time.
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themansplanation said:
Whatup dude! So finally got around to reading it! So this is my critique (assuming that’s what you were after):
Firstly, I love how you connect with the character. You obviously envision it when you’re writing it and that comes across. I also like the length of it; easily read and quick to the point, almost like the dance itself.
I think the writing style could be refined a bit and more attention to the spelling/grammar, but then you said yourself, it’s out of your comfort zone. In fairness though, an editor picks those things up and it is the ability to come up with the idea and frame the picture that is the important part and you have that.
Remember; when writing erotica it’s all about the moment. You need to force the audience to feel the moment of passion. The rawness. Sex is so elemental and vicious in its grip on us and it’s how you get that across to the reader that will define whether or not you hit the right chord with them.
Anyway, the main point is, I enjoyed it! So well done my dude.
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vinnieh said:
Thank you for reading this and giving your opinions. I’m usually good at spelling and grammar, but even I sometimes forget. Thanks for putting across your thoughts on it. I really appreciate your comment, as your writing is extremely good.
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themansplanation said:
I think when writing a story, it can be really easy to get so caught up in it that you make a lot of mistakes. I know when I read over my first drafts it it literally littered with them!
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vinnieh said:
Oh I totally agree. I really like descriptive writing which is why movie and television reviews are what I enjoy to write. Your erotica work is very well done.
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themansplanation said:
Thanks dude. Your support and comments are always appreciated!
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vinnieh said:
Likewise, your support is appreciated here. I have plenty of reviews here so whenever you get time be sure to give them a read.
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Megan said:
Nicely done! Makes me think Satrap was a well endowed man! How … Stimulating!
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vinnieh said:
That was the idea when writing this. Stimulating is what I was aiming for.
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Megan said:
Mission accomplished!
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vinnieh said:
It was an amateur story but everyone appeared to like it.
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Megan said:
It has a really fun vibe to it. As well as the sexy…
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vinnieh said:
I’m happy to hear your feedback.
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Megan said:
My pleasure.
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vinnieh said:
Speaking of pleasure, did you derive any from this?
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Megan said:
😉 that’s what I just said, right?
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vinnieh said:
Yes. What did you like the most in the story?
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Megan said:
The whole ‘package’
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vinnieh said:
Haha, I like the naughtiness in that answer.
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